1. This is essay is quite unbalanced. There is no introduction and conclusion.
2. The tour in the haunted mansion was unforgettable! I'm still excited about it!
3. Why are you so irresponsible? Can't you keep your promises?
4. I have begin inactive. My mum says I have too much energy.
5. Your arguments are too illogical. It's hard to understand you.
6. There's nothing impossible! I just keep trying and believe in yourself!
